Songs by Stephanie @StephLP18

The Barracks
#163

My mom wrote a poem she doesn’t think it’s good but I want to know what you guys think

Fragile little shattered and tore up
Pancelien doll who was f…ed up
Put Faith in faithless
Now you taste my fist
Fear my kiss
Can’t resist another census with you

I’m though this time
I am the one that made you
Now it’s time to break you in two
Such cold lied your ice eyes
I’ll tear you in pieces this time
I’m the one that made you
Now it’s time to break you in two

Tormented and hollow
A painful pill to sollow
You lead me to follow
Built up smacked down
Can’t Chase you around
Gave my heart away
To the mindless games you play

I’m though this time
I am the one that made you
Now it’s time to break you in two
Such cold lied your ice eyes
I’ll tear you in pieces this time
I’m the one that made you
Now it’s time to break you in two

I let you use me
Trapped in my misery
Only needing your hand
Wanting you to be my man
Well you pushed me away
With the shield you portray
I can’t face another day
I had to let you out
Even when you poured my doubt

I’m though this time
I am the one that made you
Now it’s time to break you in two
Such cold lied your ice eyes
I’ll tear you in pieces this time
I’m the one that made you
Now it’s time to break you in two

I am the one that made you
Now it’s time to break you in two

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#164

Just a short feedback, ya awesome- blessed and very lucky to have the talent of writing- these new songs are AMAZING :tada: as I already told you my dear :hugs: ( the one of your mom is ok… I like yours way more :heart_eyes:)

#165

I can’t take this any more
You calling me a no good filthy whore
Thinking I am wrong about this and that
But your no better then a fithly rat
Trying to make me fell like I am worth nothing
Well everyone knows I am at least worth something

Unlike you
Who is ready to f…k you know who
And you forced me on a never ending train
That’s been taking a stain

Then it goes back the way it was
Before
You. Calling me a no good. Filthy whore
Thinking I am wrong about this and that but your no better then a fithly rat
Trying to make me fell like I am worth nothing
Well everyone knows I am at least worth something

Telling me I am a no good piece of sh.t
Well you get another hit
And you come back saying your sorry
Saying you never meant to cheat on me with carly

Then it goes back the way it was
Before
You. Calling me a no good. Filthy whore
Thinking I am wrong about this and that but your no better then a fithly rat
Trying to make me fell like I am worth nothing
Well everyone knows I am at least worth something

Saying that I am your only love
Saying I remind you of dove

Then it goes to the way it was before
You. Calling me a no good. Filthy whore
Thinking I am wrong about this and that but your no matter your a fithly rat
Trying to make me fell like I am worth nothing
Well everyone knows I am at least worth something

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#166

My version

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#167

Feels like it’s growing on you- let it flow, this is a power rap imo- what a flooow :fire:

#168

Guys please be honest which one did you like more

Mine or my mom’s

#169

It’s not exactly an apple to apple comparison, one’s a poem and the other a song from what I understand, unless I’m wrong. I personally like the poem because it sounds darker. Also it uses the word “tormented” and I really like that word. :stuck_out_tongue: :joy:

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#170

I personally think my mom’s stuff is better

But she has been writing for 25 years

I have been writing for about a year and half

But I am slowly getting better

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#171

This is just so well written! :heart_eyes: the words she chose are what makes the difference I think… yours is good too! But well this time have to vote for your mum :heart:

#172

You guys made my mom really happy

@the_termin8r. @lpfan61

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#173

I am going to challenge myself to write a new song every week

And right now I am working on another
Because the only way I Will get better is keep practicing

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#175

My new song is done

But I don’t know if I like it compared to some of my other stuff it’s not that good

#176

Post it! pleeeease! :blush:

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#177

I can’t say no to you

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#178

My heart is like a tricking time bomb
And I have no where else to stand on
It’s been poisoned
It’s to late for it be Rosen
I trusted your disgue
And you made me realize
All you did was make me stuffer
And I had to protect myself form you with a cover

Because I used to be nice
But I was turned into a patch of ice
Now I am left so cold
Well you get the easy road

My heart is like a tricking time bomb
And I have no where else to stand on
It’s been poisoned
It’s to late for it be Rosen
I trusted your disgue
And you made me realize
All you did was make me stuffer
And I had to protect myself form you with a cover

Your heart is rotten to the core
Making everyday a war
Now you crying saying I left you in the dirt
But I thought you liked the hurt

My heart is like a tricking time bomb
And I have no where else to stand on
It’s been poisoned
It’s to late for it be Rosen
I trusted your disgue
And you made me realize
All you did was make me stuffer
And I had to protect myself form you with a cover

You had enough lies to fill the sea
Because that’s all you were to me
Now my insides are Hollow
Because I choose to follow

My heart is like a tricking time bomb
And I have no where else to stand on
It’s been poisoned
It’s to late for it be Rosen
I trusted your disgue
And you made me realize
All you did was make me stuffer
And I had to protect myself form you with my cover

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#179

It’s not so bad! Maybe it needs another strophe since it’s a lyric…it seems a bit incomplete like this, but you wrote it nicely! :smile:

#180

So you just think it needs another verse. @LPfan61. Is that what your trying to say

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#181

Yeah!Oh you’re fast!! :nerd_face: :smile:

#183

I was thinking of some well I was typing in quickly added to it lol

#184

Well done!Now it’s perfect! :smile: :blush: