Empty- The Unity of Us

The Barracks
#1

Hey everyone!

As you all know, I’m an absolute beginner with song writing and am very bad with song structures. So hopefully this makes sense. I very loosely based the structure on John Legend’s All Of Me, even though this song is not meant to be ‘romantic’. Also, I apologize in advance if I missed out someone, I went according to the tag list. @Honey8 I didn’t include you because you had mentioned you are busy with exams- Good Luck with them! Welcome to all the new members. New members, don’t forget to add the @ before the name of the next line when you write yours!

Genre: Ballad

Verse1:

Line 1: @rickvanmeijel
Line 2: alz89
Line 3: jabinquaken
Line 4: Marilau
Line 5: theearlywalker
Line 6: framos1792

Pre-Chorus:

Line 1: Ironsoldier16
Line 2: yomarques
Line 3: jabinquaken

Chorus

Line 1: NickGr
Line 2: framos1792
Line 3: Marilau
Line 4: theearlywalker

Verse 2

Line 1: acemasters
Line 2: yomarques
Line 3: rickvanmeijel
Line 4: NickGr
Line 5: Ironsoldier16
Line 6: AJ_7

Pre-Chorus

Chorus

Bridge

Line 1: jabinquaken
Line 2: alz89
Line 3: acemasters

End Chorus (Depends on the main chorus, might need to change)
Line 1 of chorus
Line 2 of chorus

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#2

Structure looks absolutely fine!

Verse1:

Caught in the chaos now
Line 2: @alz89
Line 3: jabinquaken
Line 4: Marilau
Line 5: theearlywalker
Line 6: framos1792

Pre-Chorus:

Line 1: Ironsoldier16
Line 2: yomarques
Line 3: jabinquaken

Chorus

Line 1: NickGr
Line 2: framos1792
Line 3: Marilau
Line 4: theearlywalker

Verse 2

Line 1: acemasters
Line 2: yomarques
Line 3: rickvanmeijel
Line 4: NickGr
Line 5: Ironsoldier16
Line 6: AJ_7

Pre-Chorus

Chorus

Bridge

Line 1: jabinquaken
Line 2: alz89
Line 3: acemasters

End Chorus (Depends on the main chorus, might need to change)
Line 1 of chorus
Line 2 of chorus

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#3

Thanks a lot dear @AJ_7 :heart_eyes::hugs::smiley: thank you soo much for the wishes. True a lot busy with stuffs here… thanks for caring :purple_heart::two_hearts:
Mega hugs to everyone! Keep that lovely smie on your face !! :revolving_hearts::two_hearts::hugs:

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#4

@AJ_7 structure looks fine and with that title you could turn it into a love song of sorts

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#5

Verse1:

Caught in the chaos now
Trapped here and i wonder how
Line 3: @jabinquaken
Line 4: Marilau
Line 5: theearlywalker
Line 6: framos1792

Pre-Chorus:

Line 1: Ironsoldier16
Line 2: yomarques
Line 3: jabinquaken

Chorus

Line 1: NickGr
Line 2: framos1792
Line 3: Marilau
Line 4: theearlywalker

Verse 2

Line 1: acemasters
Line 2: yomarques
Line 3: rickvanmeijel
Line 4: NickGr
Line 5: Ironsoldier16
Line 6: AJ_7

Pre-Chorus

Chorus

Bridge

Line 1: jabinquaken
Line 2: alz89
Line 3: acemasters

End Chorus (Depends on the main chorus, might need to change)
Line 1 of chorus
Line 2 of chorus

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#6

@jabinquaken

Your turn!!!

#7

I remember. Just over busy head. Needed to think of something that would match the theme.

Verse1:

Caught in the chaos now
Trapped here and i wonder how
The space and time escape
Line 4: @Marilau
Line 5: theearlywalker
Line 6: framos1792

Pre-Chorus:

Line 1: Ironsoldier16
Line 2: yomarques
Line 3: jabinquaken

Chorus

Line 1: NickGr
Line 2: framos1792
Line 3: Marilau
Line 4: theearlywalker

Verse 2

Line 1: acemasters
Line 2: yomarques
Line 3: rickvanmeijel
Line 4: NickGr
Line 5: Ironsoldier16
Line 6: AJ_7

Pre-Chorus

Chorus

Bridge

Line 1: jabinquaken
Line 2: alz89
Line 3: acemasters

End Chorus (Depends on the main chorus, might need to change)
Line 1 of chorus
Line 2 of chorus

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#8

Verse1:

Caught in the chaos now
Trapped here and i wonder how
The space and time escape
Lost here in my disgrace
Line 5: @theearlywalker
Line 6: framos1792

Pre-Chorus:

Line 1: Ironsoldier16
Line 2: yomarques
Line 3: jabinquaken

Chorus

Line 1: NickGr
Line 2: framos1792
Line 3: Marilau
Line 4: theearlywalker

Verse 2

Line 1: acemasters
Line 2: yomarques
Line 3: rickvanmeijel
Line 4: NickGr
Line 5: Ironsoldier16
Line 6: AJ_7

Pre-Chorus

Chorus

Bridge

Line 1: jabinquaken
Line 2: alz89
Line 3: acemasters

End Chorus (Depends on the main chorus, might need to change)
Line 1 of chorus
Line 2 of chorus

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#9

Verse1:

Caught in the chaos now
Trapped here and i wonder how
The space and time escape
Lost here in my disgrace
And I cry and I scream and I shout out loud
Line 6: @framos1792

Pre-Chorus:

Line 1: Ironsoldier16
Line 2: yomarques
Line 3: jabinquaken

Chorus

Line 1: NickGr
Line 2: framos1792
Line 3: Marilau
Line 4: theearlywalker

Verse 2

Line 1: acemasters
Line 2: yomarques
Line 3: rickvanmeijel
Line 4: NickGr
Line 5: Ironsoldier16
Line 6: AJ_7

Pre-Chorus

Chorus

Bridge

Line 1: jabinquaken
Line 2: alz89
Line 3: acemasters

End Chorus (Depends on the main chorus, might need to change)
Line 1 of chorus
Line 2 of chorus

#10

Verse1:

Caught in the chaos now
Trapped here and i wonder how
The space and time escape
Lost here in my disgrace
And I cry and I scream and I shout out loud
My noise lost in the echo goes unheard

Pre-Chorus:

Line 1: @Ironsoldier16
Line 2: yomarques
Line 3: jabinquaken

Chorus

Line 1: NickGr
Line 2: framos1792
Line 3: Marilau
Line 4: theearlywalker

Verse 2

Line 1: acemasters
Line 2: yomarques
Line 3: rickvanmeijel
Line 4: NickGr
Line 5: Ironsoldier16
Line 6: AJ_7

Pre-Chorus

Chorus

Bridge

Line 1: jabinquaken
Line 2: alz89
Line 3: acemasters

End Chorus (Depends on the main chorus, might need to change)
Line 1 of chorus
Line 2 of chorus

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#11

Verse1:

Caught in the chaos now
Trapped here and i wonder how
The space and time escape
Lost here in my disgrace
And I cry and I scream and I shout out loud
My noise lost in the echo goes unheard

Pre-Chorus:

Wandering in the empty of this dark
Line 2: @yomarques
Line 3: jabinquaken

Chorus

Line 1: NickGr
Line 2: framos1792
Line 3: Marilau
Line 4: theearlywalker

Verse 2

Line 1: acemasters
Line 2: yomarques
Line 3: rickvanmeijel
Line 4: NickGr
Line 5: Ironsoldier16
Line 6: AJ_7

Pre-Chorus

Chorus

Bridge

Line 1: jabinquaken
Line 2: alz89
Line 3: acemasters

End Chorus (Depends on the main chorus, might need to change)
Line 1 of chorus
Line 2 of chorus

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#12

Verse1:

Caught in the chaos now
Trapped here and i wonder how
The space and time escape
Lost here in my disgrace
And I cry and I scream and I shout out loud
My noise lost in the echo goes unheard

Pre-Chorus:

Wandering in the empty of this dark
All that I built has fallen apart
Line 3: @jabinquaken

Chorus

Line 1: NickGr
Line 2: framos1792
Line 3: Marilau
Line 4: theearlywalker

Verse 2

Line 1: acemasters
Line 2: yomarques
Line 3: rickvanmeijel
Line 4: NickGr
Line 5: Ironsoldier16
Line 6: AJ_7

Pre-Chorus

Chorus

Bridge

Line 1: jabinquaken
Line 2: alz89
Line 3: acemasters

End Chorus (Depends on the main chorus, might need to change)
Line 1 of chorus
Line 2 of chorus

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#13

Verse1:

Caught in the chaos now
Trapped here and i wonder how
The space and time escape
Lost here in my disgrace
And I cry and I scream and I shout out loud
My noise lost in the echo goes unheard

Pre-Chorus:

Wandering in the empty of this dark
All that I built has fallen apart
But there’s a feeling built up in my heart

Chorus

@NickGr
Line 2: framos1792
Line 3: Marilau
Line 4: theearlywalker

Verse 2

Line 1: acemasters
Line 2: yomarques
Line 3: rickvanmeijel
Line 4: NickGr
Line 5: Ironsoldier16
Line 6: AJ_7

Pre-Chorus

Chorus

Bridge

Line 1: jabinquaken
Line 2: alz89
Line 3: acemasters

End Chorus (Depends on the main chorus, might need to change)
Line 1 of chorus
Line 2 of chorus

Guys, sorry but I must be honest. Mostly, I like the outcome but I got a bit tired of all of these songs about void, darkness and despair or if it is not that sad, about how mega cool we are and we gonna break all sh*t. Seriously, each time it turns to the same stuff. If the next one will take the same direction, I’m out.

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#14

I kinda feel the same about it. I think we should try to write about something different next time.

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#15

Maybe give a theme to start? So we all know to push in that direction? I agree it’s best to not be emo-y

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#16

Well, who am I to decide? The team should define the theme. I just can not keep forcing some lyrics that does not apply to me much.

#17

I did say that with the title this song could go in either direction

#18

Yup. The first lines went dark, though.

#19

Do we want to re-write the song? I think there’s no issue if everyone is okay with it.

#20

Leave the transition of the song direction for now and let it take its route

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